The Neverending Ache "Since the United States invaded Iraq in March 2003, more than 16,000 troops--mostly Army--have deserted." "...Americans are stunned and shocked when someone rejects America. They assume everyone wants to be in America, or like them. When they don't, America is l...

Thanks, Lizzy and Jimbo.

Chris

Hi Manna

Fine work here. Scene well observed and persuasive with sharp and evocative details. Well done, Manna.

Chris

jimbo wrote:Im vegetarian

Thanks, jimbo. Given the circumstances, understandable.

Chris

Warning : This poem is about the revelations about the abuse of animals in a California slaughterhouse discussed in a recent undercover report. If you are disturbed by such ideas and images, read no further. Driven to Slaughter Because the drowned cows refuse to walk to slaughter willingly, workers...

Thanks for your kind words, Jimmy. I appreciate the recommendation for the ending.

My best to you

Chris

Hi Tina I am an editor in real life and am just used to a certain consistency of presentation. Other people may not be editors but are just used to in their own writing, using conventions of style in the same way. So you see that writers have a style that they like to follow and expect other writers...

Hello Tina

Yes okay. You may type it as you find it although some of us who wish to comment on the works posted here might appreciate some consistency in presentation, so it's something you might think about. Okay?

Chris

Hi Jimmy I did not know of this particular battle until I read your poem. It is told in epic narrative style and captivates the reader with its interesting period details. You use the term "gallowglass" a couple of times. I probably wouldn't know this word except that Barbara Vine (aka Rut...

Hi Tina The last stanza is very strong and persuasive. If I may say so, I have some problem with the inconsistencies in the style of presention. You say: I just can't breathe anymore you've painted the walls with sadness This is fairly conventional, although I would make it two words "any more&...

Hello Inam, You possibly don't need the ellipses of dots at the end of each stanza since the break between a stanza already gives a pause. In fact, I would go so far as to say that the ellipses add a confusion and an unnecessary complication that you should omit. The poem reads well if a little repe...

Hello lazariuk

There ares some fine sentiments expressed here. Nicely done.

Typo in "consumed" -- only one "m" needed

Good wordplay and imagery. Enjoyed.

Chris

Hello Lion

This reads fine to me, a nice light and witty commentary on love. I am not totally sure of the meaning of "the nichten lichten" -- the night light??? but it sounds good. Fine work, Lion.

Chris

That's All Right In the autumn gale, leaves fly from the willow like bees before the apian plague began to kill off all the bees. But that's all right. The news anchor says the body count from the war's reached a new high--but we've got plenty of body bags. So that's all right. We are sending in an...

Thank you, Jimmy. Nice to be back.

Chris