solitude , remembrance
quickline of satifaction
embracing the provoked silence
glances depend , knowing every ocean
we are failed like drowned excuses
inprisoned and veiled
are you the one evaporating
into the winter spell
and when spring spelled
the dream from above
your withered in space below
vagabonds witted
like breathing into the moons
ray's of thunder
guessing who you are
felt the question leap
are commen saturation
of the deep end clear
if i knew your name
- angelbride
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Re: if i knew your name
I haven't read a poem like this in a long time. It seems entirely emotional. I sense loss, but there's not much to hold on to. Please check it over for typos. I'm not sure if you mean depend or deepened, your or you're, did spring spell or spill, ray's or rays, etc, etc. I like the failed / veiled sound.