Haiku Corner.

[Socializard]

to write a haiku
you'll need seven syllables
and then only five.

[lizzytysh]

Way to go, Socializard .

I liked your comments on Radiohead's arrangement, as well. I, too, hope they do well .


~ Lizzy

[Socializard]

thanks lizzy! i'm glad you feel the same way about radiohead too. i think they're doing something very cool.

[lizzytysh]

And at least they have a fighting chance this way... with no one having to worry about possible, eventual prosecution [a woman very recently losing in court to a music company here].


~ Lizzy

[raugust7]

I sold a woman;
But allowed her the freedom
to dictate the price.

This is the only thing i have been able to produce in a prolonged spell of profound writer's block
i thought it was quite poetic and, relatively, darkly amusing
any responses would be wonderful; it might help me surmount this unpleasently barren spell
ta

[lizzytysh]

Hi Raugust7 ~

You've got the syllables and certainly the dark humour. It doesn't have the Nature prerequisite, unless you're going for 'human nature,' conjunct the purported purpose of the sale .


~ Lizzy

[Socializard]

raugust7's haiku is funny. i dig it.

[jimbo]

cold October morn`
snuggling in my cosy bed
watching leaves fall

scary hallowe"en
ghosts dancing around my house
frightening the black cat

a cold rush ofwind
heralds winters grasp is near
as the summer fades

some Kerry Haiku
not mine

[jimbo]

Pale moon arising
amber leaves floating upwards
towards the fallow ground

rabbits foraging nuts
in the childrens autumn den
near the gushing stream

blackberry bushes
empty tins and waiting pot
grandmas pies will come

rivers edge in spring
can of worms on the bank green
the menu is trout

[lizzytysh]

blackberry bushes
empty tins and waiting pot
grandmas pies will come

This one evokes luscious memories of my teenage and young adult years and being at my then-boyfriend's and later husband's grandmother's and aunt's houses. I like it.


~ Lizzy

[Red Poppy]

jimbo, the first one defies gravity and, technically, the second one is not a haiku!

[lizzytysh]

I initially had the same thought on the first one. Something like "What !?!" Then, I thought of how leaves actually fall, with their being light enough to be caught by a breeze and briefly go upwards before continuing their descent. So, I thought maybe that's what Jimbo was going for. If not, then I need a listen on it, too.


~ Lizzy

[jimbo]

What about the element of wind ?

so no hands just paws ?

[lizzytysh]

I just noticed a "Freudian Slip" I made above, but will leave it as it's actually what I meant... in essence. I intended to say that I would need a lesson, too, on what you meant, Jimbo. Yet, I wrote I would need a listen, which fits as I was thinking that I would need to listen to what you had to say about what you actually meant... the "lesson" that never got said .


~ Lizzy

[jimbo]

Well the hazel nuts were supposed to indicate Autumn?

the hazel nut feast
enjoyed by squirels and hares
children in quietness