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Thank you Cate.............................

reptilian flurry
wild parrots lifting as one
voice of devotion

Its your soft brown eyes
your smile like a summers dawn
that have stole my heart

your lips are like roses
with my arms around your waist
you can draw my blood

When our moon did smile
and we embraced by the stream
my forever dream

as summer rises
our birds chattering in trees
and dancing on wires

thank you Byron

jimbo wrote:as the summer rises
our birds chattering in trees
and dancing on wires

as summer rises
our birds chattering in trees
dancing on wires

warmth from my child's
body, lulls me back to sleep
morning can wait

can i hold your hand
childrens love is eternal
mornings forever

cate, that seems to be a 4 - 7 - 4 ?

It's 5 - 7 -4

I didn't have another syllable to say.

Here's one that is even shorter, I had to add the word my to make it to 12 syllables. So I've got nature - I've got a season - I've got the syllables but I don't think I have a haiku yet - my description is still lacking, although it describes a moment well for me it wouldn't for the reader.

winter morning

mint tea warms
my hands, snow falls
you smile
warmth spreads

Cate wrote:
but I don't think I have a haiku yet - my description is still lacking, although it describes a moment well for me it wouldn't for the reader.

winter morning

mint tea warms
my hands, snow falls
you smile
warmth spreads

I disagree, I can see it & I like it

warmt spreads openly
between us all upwards bound
just can we hold it.......

the stars burn tonight
the wind slow but not so slow
as rapid tempests

As rapid tempests
In fine porcelain teapots
trapped no where to go