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What are we going to do with you lot ? Now, Violet, you've not only added a word to Cate's, but you've added a syllable as well, coming in at 6 . Geesh. AND you gave me an Edited line ~ double Geesh!

WHO 1. HAD 2. MADE 3. ME 4. SMILE 5.

Hmmm. I've not taken the syllabic breakdown as being how it appears in writing, but rather how it's spoken. Smile in writing is certainly one syllable. In speaking, though, it becomes two. Smi-uhl. To speak it in one would be smahhl... hmmm... deep in the mountains, Southern accent. Interesting point, Violet. Either you're in compliance or Cate is [and I'm] out of compliance. Hmmm. Who's the lead Haiku judge here?

Even so... you can't just be adding words willy-nilly .

Now, if Gullivor had continued as he ought to have, we wouldn't be having this quandary now would we ?


~ Lizzy

... well, if his lordship returns, he could be the most high Haiku judge... (though, as present circumstances seem to be indicating, he's a bit hi koo koo, methinks)...
v.

I screwed it up!
Sorry

lizzytysh wrote:enjoy the moments
yes, including the fucking
moments measure time

moments measure time
we're traveling thru this time line
last moment unkown

last moment unknown
oneness sounds monotonous
let's stay here awhile

let's stay here awhile
at this moment it's the plan
longing for something

longing for something
are you perchance my lover?
wishing for a dream...

wishing for a dream...
circumstances based on self
so never complete

Gullivor wrote:wishing for a dream...
circumstances based on self
so never complete

so never complete
push up the mountain, then breathe--
boulder poised to roll

{entitled: "Sisyphus"}

boulder poised to roll
issues of life confront us
living on the edge

living on the edge
if all collapses we'll find
how close we are now

how close we are now:
ice breaks up and bumps the shores
first true sign of spring

First true sign of spring
the rock rolls down the mountian
forever happy