The labourer

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Sandra
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The labourer

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In a white envelope
I give you what you asked
Your letter of presentation
To your new boss
To the future
To the never more
I do not write about:
The mistrutfulness
The times I spied you
The times I discredited you
The times I did not give you
What you needed
But I reveal for you:
Some traits
You ignore about yourself:
Your meekness and your calm
Your lack of “vices”
And your strength
In the air remain
Your other traits that I myself ignore
Or those I did not see
And I forgive
The time you took that trifle
And I tell you “come back” whenever you want
And now I know that maybe you will never come back
I and feel sorry
This is the end of the “Good mornings”
And “Bye byes”
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Post by Byron »

I love trifle. I'd have taken it as well.
I enjoyed your twisting of the tale Sandra. Nothing is exactly as it seems. Thank you.
"Bipolar is a roller-coaster ride without a seat belt. One day you're flying with the fireworks; for the next month you're being scraped off the trolley" I said that.
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ok Byron 8) ......sometimes I do not know if I send the right message (or the message I want ) then I should apologize for that but I like to write in english ....When I got your answer I knew you got the idea, thank you. ......trifle....mmmmmm.."pequeñeces" in spanish.....
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Hi Sandra ~

When I returned to your poem just now, I was surprized to see that what I had written this morning when I read it, was not here. I'm realizing that I didn't submit it because I planned on saying more later, when I had time. However, now i'm too tired :? . So, I'll at least repeat what I'd said earlier, which is that I love how you so effectively reveal love and missing in your poems.

~ Lizzy
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Sandra wrote: In the air remain
Your other traits that I myself ignore
Or those I did not see
Hey Sandra- I like your poem very much. The three lines above have a very cool rhythm. I think your english is beautiful. :)
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I appreciate your words....
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